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Lady Spaz
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Posted: 30 April 2006 at 6:16am | IP Logged Quote Lady Spaz

Lovely is the body of Eve;
Rugged is the body of Adam;
But, in a rushed world of lust
it is easy to forget
that we are only human,
Created in the image
of a manipulitive creator
that cares not for a world of the living Hell.
I laugh at those who see their body as a thing of play.
Enjoy it while you can...........

Do I need to make any corrections to my poem? I was hoping to publish it in the school newspaper......



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Posted: 15 May 2006 at 10:34pm | IP Logged Quote Tutor16873

Though your poem is quite rough, I will not try to change it for you. I'll just correct your spelling mistake.

Lovely is the body of Eve;
Rugged is the body of Adam;
But, in a rushed world of lust
it is easy to forget
that we are only human,
Created in the image
of a manipulative creator
that cares not for a world of the living Hell.
I laugh at those who see their body as a thing of play.
Enjoy it while you can...........

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Posted: 16 May 2006 at 4:03am | IP Logged Quote Xxemo_princessx

i think it's fine just the way it is



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Lostaries
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Posted: 13 January 2007 at 5:55am | IP Logged Quote Lostaries

The punctuation is a bit off I believe. You can't have a co-ordinating cunjunction after a semicolon; its considered a sentence fragment. For example: Rugged is the body of Adam;
But, in a rushed world of lust...

This is incorrect; it should be: Rugged is the body of Adam. Although, in a rushed world of lust...

From what I understand anyhow; I could be wrong.



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Posted: 23 January 2007 at 1:23pm | IP Logged Quote Emo1994

That poem is quite beautiful. You have a talent. 

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Posted: 29 June 2007 at 11:48pm | IP Logged Quote -cally-

The poem is just fine the way it is only a little bit spelling error but tutor16873 has already corrected it for you. Btw, Its a great poem..   I do hope people will enjoy reading it..

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